化工化學工程師
1~5年經驗／碩士／化學工程學類
My name is Curtis Ｏ Ｏ-Ｏ. I am Ｏ years old and graduated from ＯＯ University of Technology in Ｏ with a major in Chemical Engineering. My master’s thesis was entitled “Rapid detection of Salmonella using gold nanoparticles and immunochromatography.” Although completing my thesis required complex experiments, and time pressure was inevitable, the experience taught me to be patient and meticulous, as well as how to handle stress. Having gained expertise in the fields of nanoparticle synthesis and chemical materials detection, I am interested in applying for the advertised position of RD engineer. From my family as well as from my studies I have learned to be a careful and responsible person. I am ambitious and willing to try new things; I’m ready to face whatever challenges the future might hold. Following the successful completion of my master’s studies, I am looking forward to applying what I have learned at school, and I am prepared to tackle any challenges with the momentum of my passion. I know my English ability is not the best, but I also realize the importance of being able to speak foreign languages, which is why I have sought to improve my English reading, writing, speaking and listening skills. I obtained 760 points in the Test of English for International Communication (TOEIC), and I believe I have gained language skills that would enhance my performance in your company. While I do not have work experience in the chemical sector, I do have experience as both a cram school tutor and as a staffer at many international conferences. I have established good friendships with many people in the industry and understand the importance of teamwork. All of this has taught me a lot about the value of good communication skills, and I have also learned that it is sometimes necessary to change my perspective and approach in order to solve a problem. I believe my enthusiasm for learning new things will help me adjust quickly to any new work environment. It is my sincere desire to render my utmost service to your company. I would welcome the opportunity to answer any questions you might have in an interview, or via my contact details listed above.
I cleaned up the formatting – the whole resume was in the same point size, and all the text was bold, which does not look good or read easily. It’s better to format the resume to make different sections stand out, so that the reader can more easily find the information they need.
When writing something like “July. 2009 – Aug. 2011,” it’s not necessary to put a period after “July,” since it’s not an abbreviation like “Aug.”
It’s better to write out abbreviated terms the first time, otherwise the reader might not know exactly what is meant, like “Test of English for International Communication (TOEIC).” Then you can just refer to TOEIC later on.
“Native speaker of Mandarin Chinese,” not “Native speaker in Mandarin Chinese.”
Remember to clean up punctuation, eg: immunochromatography,” – not: immunochromatography ”. There should be one space after a period, but never before it. Also beware of quotation marks: if you put a space between the opening quote mark and the first letter, the wrong quote marks will be used by most word processors. So, “Rapid detection” – not: ” Rapid detection ”.
The name you use at the top of your resume did not contain your English name, although you use it in the biography. It’s important to be consistent, especially in how you write your own name.
It’s “master’s thesis,” “master thesis.”
Rather than saying “My expertise is … , and I am interested in applying for the advertised position for an RD engineer,” use something like “Having gained expertise in the fields of … , I am interested in applying for the advertised position of RD engineer.”
The sentence “I’m ready to face the challenges of the future now.” does not need the word “now,” since the verb, “face.” implies present tense.
When you say “I am looking forward to apply,” the “apply” should also have an -ing: “ looking forward to applying.”
I’m not sure what you mean by “I established good friendships with various leader.” I changed it to “I have established good friendships with many people in the industry.” Please check if this is right.
Don’t sound too desperate for an interview: I changed“I would really appreciate if you could arrange an interview for me to further present myself” to “I would welcome the opportunity to answer any questions you might have in an interview, or via my contact details listed above.”