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1~5年經驗／大學／企業管理學類

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My name is ＯＯＯＯＯ ＯＯＯＯ and I would like to apply for the position of Marketing and Public Relations Assistant at the ＯＯＯＯＯＯＯＯ ＯＯＯＯＯＯ ＯＯＯＯＯＯ Hotel as advertised in …(fill in blank)……………...

I was born in ＯＯＯＯＯＯ, Taiwan, on ＯＯＯＯＯ ＯＯＯ, ＯＯＯＯ, into a small, but close-knit family. My parents set a good example for me and from an early age, I aimed to achieve academic success and formed the habit of working hard in school to attain my goal. As I pursued my love of knowledge, I discovered the world of finance and Financial Management, in particular, became my passion. Whenever the chance arises to participate in anything related to finance, I do not hesitate to grab it.

A well-known saying proclaims that "Actions speak louder than words," and I agree with that stance, so I always go above and beyond what is required. I believe that one should always try their best to embody the views they express, a position I arrived at after deliberating the dilemma of pre-determined actions versus free will - a problem that surfaces in many fields of study, including finance.

Society has taught me how to get along with others by acknowledging and accepting their differences and similarities. Along the way, I have also learned the importance of self-respect and this prompts me to ensure that, although I love studying, I dedicate time to developing my other interests, which include traveling, surfing and keeping fit. Yet whether I am in the classroom or the gym, I continue to abide by my core principle that one should take what one does seriously, with dignity and respect

In addition to pursuing my academic interests and hobbies, I have also begun volunteering to continue developing myself into a well-rounded individual. Although my workload at school was often heavy, I managed to balance between my studies with the aforementioned extracurricular activities.

I feel that my outlook on life and adherence to my principles have helped me grow into a confident person who knows how to outline and pursue their goals. My long-term plan is to continue growing and eventually getting the chance to demonstrate my aptitudes and interest in finance in a professional sphere.

Throughout my life, both in and out of school, I have shown that I can overcome obstacles and meet challenges successfully, which is why I feel I would make a great addition to your team at the ＯＯＯＯＯＯＯＯ ＯＯＯＯＯＯ ＯＯＯＯＯＯ Hotel.

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Your English is wonderful, my only comment on the resume is that you may want to include some personal data such as your birthday, sex, marital status.

If you are applying to US companies, the autobiography is not the appropriate style. First, it’s too long, you would have to trim it down. It is also too much about your childhood and family background, this is nice, but completely irrelevant.

If it is a cover letter, you need to mention the position you are applying for in the first sentence and where you saw it posted.

You mention finance a lot, but the position is for marketing and PR, so you should mention what skills you have gained from your finance studies that can be applied to these two fields.

I would recommend only keeping what is strictly relevant to the position you are applying for.