行政人員

1~5年經驗／碩士／公共行政學類

修改後自傳：

After [x] years living in the OO and completing a social science degree at the University of O O, I challenged myself with vocational goals, which have met success. My return to Taiwan has opened many doors, with my training aimed at capitalizing on opportunities in multiple sectors of the business world.

Over the past O years, I have worked as:
a travel agent;
an administrative staff member at OOOO bank;
a substitute public-school teacher;
an administrative staff member for a firm that produced technical patents, where I translated patent applications;
an English-language administrative specialist at an online tutoring company.

I devoted myself to my liberal arts program in O and paid attention to the finer details of education and society in the OO, while my professors became good friends and prudent mentors, offering great advice and inspiring further study.

My English-language proficiency is a key aspect of my career ambitions. I seek to work in a multi-skilled position where my ability can benefit [company name] and society as a whole.

[past-employers paragraph]

I am optimistic and active, and also confident that I would suit the [name of position] position at your company.

I appreciate your time and hope to meet in an interview.

Yours sincerely,
[English name]

修改建議：
Add detail of time spent abroad. [x]

Instead of speaking about your professors, maybe share how past employers have responded to your work. [past-employers paragraph]

Make each application company-specific by referring to the company name and the position advertised. [company name]; [name of position]

Add English name. [English name]

The English-language skill seems to be the main focus, so it was moved down, if you decide to add the suggestion about past employers, that might best go after the English-language skill paragraph.

Instead of a list of past jobs, describe more about what the positions show about your skills. Ie, “as a travel agent, I listened to clients and helped them connect their plans amid the constraints of transportation and accommodation needs.”

The wording in the original is verbose. Keep sentences short and focus on specific items that are germane to the goal of catching the readers’ attention and landing an interview.