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My name is O. I’m a graduate of National O University. I had wanted to learn English for a long time, therefore I decided on Applied Foreign Language as my major in university. That way I would not only improve my English, but also enhance my language ability and learn different kinds of English as well. Being aware of and facing global change, I studied hard to prepare for the TOEIC, on which I scored a OOO.

I’m an easygoing, extroverted and optimistic person. I’m good at interacting with other people. In college, I participated in every activity, regardless of whether it was school-related or not. I also had several part-time jobs to build my work experience.

In one part-time job, I was a guide at a puppet museum in O Township. I was responsible for introducing stories for different periods of puppets. I then worked as a receptionist, where I was in charge of contacting schools or office assistants, and even some chiefs, to discuss details about meeting agendas. I’ve also worked part-time at a drink shop, a bakery, a breakfast shop and a restaurant.

In school, I was the public relations officer for my class, which entailed planning various outdoor activities. For our graduation performance, I was responsible for filing documents, arranging personnel and requesting sponsorships from shops near our school.

I think it’s important to have good English-language skills in this society. As I’ve always wanted to work in the field of sales marketing, I took the TOEIC to improve my business English. I hope I have a chance to join your professional team.

修改建議：
When telling your personal story in an autobiography or cover letter, try to keep a logical progression, which keeps the focus on you; you originally jumped around a little.

Instead of listing your attributes or interests, add detail to make it more personal. Your resume contains information, such as how you scored on standardized tests, but an autobiography is your chance to sell yourself.

Actions speak louder than words: Instead of listing your strengths, give examples of real-life situations where you used those strengths to solve a problem or get something done.

Avoid excessive use of exclamation marks. Think of an autobiography or cover letter as a way of formally introducing yourself, which means it should be well-written and professional; save the enthusiasm for a face-to-face interview.