國外業務

6年以上經驗／大學／英美語文學類

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My name is O O. I was born in OO. I graduated from O O University with a Bachelor’s degree in foreign languages, supplemented with courses in business and literature.

Since graduation, I have worked as a teacher and a reporter, and am currently working in sales, as an international trade representative, with eight years’ experience in this field. These positions have enabled me to cultivate valuable competencies such as leadership, organizational and interpersonal communication skills. I have also been able to develop my negotiation and problem-solving abilities, as well as my ability to work effectively as part of a team.

I have demonstrated myself to be a quick learner and to have initiative. I pride myself in my ability to complete any tasks I am set.

I am now looking for a challenging position as a sales director with an opportunity for professional and personal growth. I would like to move into a management position in five years.
I am an easy-going yet pro-active individual. I get on well with people, and firmly believe that a team is more than the sum of its individual parts, and yet I am also quite prepared to work diligently on my own.

I am always keen to learn new skills and spend time on my professional development. In my spare time, I am an avid reader, and also take an interest in cinema and music. I enjoy sports, dancing and travel.

修改建議：
This is an application for a job, not an actual autobiography. As such, it should conform to certain conventions. While you are clearly keen to represent yourself as a positive, warm individual, it’s probably best to avoid an overly poetic style.

Generally, in terms of structure, start with education, then job experience, and finally your personality and personal interests. This is probably the order in which the potential employer is interested in knowing about you.

You say you graduated in foreign languages. It is therefore even more important that you do not include grammatical inaccuracies. In English, “aggressive” can have negative connotations: “pro-active” might be a better word choice. “Besides” can suggest the negation or minimizing of what comes before it; better to use “also,” “in addition” or “as well.”

In terms of interests, everybody likes movies, reading, music and travel. Try to set yourself apart from the crowd a little, either by listing more unusual interests or being more specific (I love art house movies; I like classical music; I love backpacking; or I am interested in visiting other countries to experience different cuisines, etc.

Good luck in finding a job you love.